If your goal really is to write short and unambiguous go commentary, you should take a look at the solution offered by Šahovski Informator (Chess Informant).
For the last 50 years they have published the most important games every trimester or so with extensive annotations. Most importantly, they designed a set of glyphs (don’t say emojis) to convey the most important information, e.g. “unclear situation”, “white has the initiative”, “potential sequence for later”, so that their commentaries are without words. This way they have a single worldwide edition and masters all over the world can benefit from it with no language barrier.
To give you an idea of the impact of this publication, Garry Kasparov once said “We are all the children of Informant”.
Do you have a reasoning for some of the spelling changes to the root words? I assume you’re trying to eliminate rarer phonemes; do you have a defined phonological inventory you’re going for? Is the syllable structure "(C)(C)V(s)(C)"? Does it follow the sonority hierarchy strictly, or have exceptions (or follow a different model entirely)? Is “ae” a blend or two distinct syllables? Does the spelling of root words change with idiolect, or is it standardized even if the written form differs from the spoken? Are there plans to expand this scheme?
Is it pro-drop? Are there constraints on the form of root words to reduce/eliminate the potential confusion that could arise trying to differentiate an inflected word from an un-inflected word which happens to be homophonous with the inflected word? (eg: “If white lives, then white is alive.” --> “If levi, then alevi.”, which could be misconstrued as “If White lives, then (!) White lives.”) Maybe prohibit certain sounds (perhaps all vowels?) from the initial phoneme of a root word to reserve them for prefixes, and ditto (though probably needing a more complicated set of restrictions to fit with what is already known) for the suffixes? What are the stress rules? Penultimate? Penultimate syllable of the root word? (In Esperanto, the stress is on the “ant” even though it is an affix (historically, probably one could make a strong case that “Esperant-” is an indivisible word and not “Esper-ant-” in modern Esperanto.), but one could also take advantage of tying stress to the root in order to help sort out which ending syllable(s) are affixes and which are part of the root.
The current form as proposed by bugcat seems to use both nouns and verbs? But it’s not very clear which affixes can apply to which part of speech, and which (if any) affixes change the part of speech (and to what). Also, it’s unclear if there is any agreement. For example, do you need to say “ais afaetu”, or can you say “is afaetu”, or would the correct form be “ais faetu”?